They were going slow at the start but, when they hit 1000 metres, they started catching up.
The calm blue water bobbed up and down. Nathan and Joseph were picking up speed and they were coming into 3rd place.
I was feeling excited, then they passed another canoe. They were coming 2nd.
I was cheering, "Go, New Zealand!"
They were catching up to the leader, and then, New Zealand passed the leader.
New Zealand was going as fast as they could to the finish line.
New Zealand came first. They won the gold medal.
I was happy.
Great story Cameron. Go New Zealand!
ReplyDeleteWell done Cameron your story is really exciting. I felt really happy reading you description of the race.
ReplyDeleteHi Cameron,
ReplyDeleteYour writing seems to feel like a rowing race, a bit slow at the start, as they gear up and get their rhythm going, faster in the middle and exciting as they maintain and try to build up pace and then short and sharp at the end as they crossed the finish line, exhausted.
It is great to show pace in the story, it can keep the audience interested.
Mrs Atkins